Step 5 Adverbs

Adverbs are Evil

Well, not really. As writers most of us love words. Adverbs lend color and life to descriptions. However, when they are used too often they tend to distract from the story and can leave your readers saying, "Huh?" Do not overuse. When you edit make sure the adverbs in your story are necessary. Also make sure they are placed in the correct spots.

The most overused adverb/adjective is very.
Adverbs usually end in ly.
Adverbs tell: how, when or where (sometimes how many)

ex. "Perhaps." His voice was a whisper in the sultry air.
Her back stiffened and she squared her shoulders. Despite the prudent and wise council she gave herself, she was more determined than ever to beat this man at his own games.
Or my games she amended ruefully.
She could not remain quiet, nor could she give in to the threat hovering over her head. "You want the land, the power and the castle," she went on to tell him.
"Of course he agreed, his lips now slanting downward as if he sought words meant to appease her prickly attitude. "Don't forget the greatest prize of all." He pushed away from the castle wall, once again the sun glinting on his raven black hair.


ex. "Perhaps." His voice was a willowy whisper in the sultry air.
Her back slightly stiffened and she squared her shoulders. Despite the desperately prudent and wise council she gave herself, she was more determined than ever to beat this dangerously dark man at his own games.
Or my silly games she amended ruefully.
She could not remain quiet, nor could she give in to the threat hovering dangerously over her head. "You want the land, the power and the castle," she went on to tell him determinedly.
"Of course he agreed happily, his lips now slanting downward as if he sought the words meant to rightfully appease her very prickly attitude. "Don't forget the greatest prize of all." He pushed slightly away from the castle wall, once again the sun glinting on his rakishly raven black hair.